In the following excerpt, a writer tries to persuade this supervisor to respond to a government request for proposals (rfp) to build an unmanned surveillance plane for the military. which aspects of the paragraph undercut the effectiveness of the passage?

i think we are making a serious mistake by not responding. if we don't respond to this proposal, we will lose our competitive edge. at a conference last month, for example, i spoke to a couple of people who said the market for unmanned surveillance aircraft will grow exponentially during the next 10 years. can we talk about this more at next week's planning meeting?