Read the passage, which lacks vivid description, strong imagery, and dialogue. Then rewrite the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that shows Denise
is relieved and joyful.
Passage
Just as the final school bell rang, Ms. Smithers handed Denise the math test.
Denise turned away and flipped it over to reveal the grade, and then she
stepped out into the hallway and closed the door. She felt happy. Denise
walked down the school hallway and out into the afternoon where her mother
was waiting. Denise showed her the test, and her mother was happy too,
Lo

Bravery can you to do something that is new, frightening, or dangerous. people may need bravery to speak out against injustice or persevere when a task is difficult. think about an event in your life that required bravery. write a personal narrative that recounts the event. describe what happened and the impact the event had on your life. as you write, remember your essay will be scored based on how well you: develop a multi-paragraph response to the assigned topic that clearly communicates the purpose of your story to the audience describe the characters, setting, and conflict using meaningful sensory descriptions and details that enable the reader to visualize the experiences in your narrative. organize your story in a clear and logical manner, including an introduction, body, and conclusion. use well-structured sentences and language that are appropriate for your audience. edit your work to conform to the conventions of standard american english. use any of the tools available to you, such as the checklist, spellchecker, or graphic organizer.