Which revision best uses dialogue to improve the sentence? “yup, it was a big surprise,” i told them. “i’m excited that my painting was selected! especially since i felt so incompetent at the beginning and the competition was so ruthless.” “honestly, i was surprised,” i told them truthfully. “the competition was ruthless, and i felt incompetent at the beginning. it’s really exciting to have my painting selected! ” “i’m in! my painting is in! i feel a fist pump and a little dance coming on,” i said, grinning. i thought about how i felt so incompetent at the beginning because of the ruthless competition. “did you hear? ” i asked them. “my painting got selected! exciting, right? ” i smiled. “especially given that i felt so incompetent at the beginning and that the competition was ruthless! "
The answer is D. A dialogue involves a exchange of opinions, like a conversation towards a particular subject. Even an inner dialogue, not talking directly to the people, still passes important information that help the audience understand things not so obvious. In sentences A, B and C, phrases like "I told them" and "I said" don't seem to indicate a dialogue. But in D, "I asked them" invites the audience to a conversation.
C) " i'm in!" My painting is in! I feel a fist pump and a little dance coming on, " is aid grinning. I thought about how I felt so incompetition at the beginning because of the ruthless competition.
The letter c perfectly establishes a dialogue that improves the original text, as well as maintaining the cohesion and coherence of the original text and providing all the information necessary for the reader to understand the message that the dialogue wants to pass.
The answer is D
The answer to this question is C
The improvements with the dialogue added help so that people can understand how the characters feels what happened and what is happening at the moment.
“I’m in! My painting is in! I feel a fist pump and a little dance coming on,” I said, grinning. I thought about how I felt so incompetent at the beginning because of the ruthless competition.
'honestly i was surprised' i told them truthfully. ' the competition was ruthless and i felt incompetent at the beginning, its really exciting to have my painting selected'
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