(fluent french speakers) “Bonjour, je vais bien comment allez-vous?” translation and is it too formal to say to a family member?

Could anybody translate this into french i would be grateful: imagine being on top of the great wall of china meating all these new people seeing how the locals live. and how's your holiday going in frence? i hope everything is fine, see you soon.

Le marché a bakery for croissants, bread, baguettes 2. le centre commercial a supermarket 3. la boulangerie a mall 4. la boucherie a tobacco, postcard, magazine, candy shop 5. la charcuterie a bookstore 6. le tabac a butcher shop with whole animals, like cows, chickens, and lambs. 7. le grand magasin a meat shop for prepared meats like sausages, ham, etc. 8. l'hypermarché a market 9. la librairie a department store 10. la bijouterie a jewelry shop

Could someone who speaks french check over some french sentences i wrote? my work: mon village est près d'un lac, alors il fait froid et venteux. je n'aime pas le froid ou le vent. mon temps préféré est quand il y a du soleil avec une brise. j'aime ce temps parce que la brise ne fait pas le du soleil temps aussi chaud et le soleil ne fait pas la brise aussi froid. *by the french word 'temps' i mean weather.* i am describing my favortite type of weather and why i like it. : )