In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. explain where it could be improved. then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. use correct spelling and grammar. playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. the winter offers more than a time for kids to have fun. there are many things to do in the snow. it is unfortunate that so many people find the wintertime annoying. more people should step outside to enjoy the snow. i am glad i grew up where it snows.

Proofread the following sentence and correct the spelling and grammar errors. there are two errors. go through reception and turned right at the l entrance.

Which two passages in this excerpt from the death of ivan illych does leo tolstoy use to suggest that ivan ilych feels like his life is slipping away from him? "what's the use? it makes no difference," he said to himself, staring with wide-open eyes into the darkness. "death. yes, death. and none of them knows or wishes to know it, and they have no pity for me. now they are playing." (he heard through the door the distant sound of a song and its accompaniment.) "it's all the same to them, but they will die too! fools! i first, and they later, but it will be the same for them. and now they are merry . . the beasts! " anger choked him and he was agonizingly, unbearably miserable. "it is impossible that all men have been doomed to suffer this awful horror! " he raised himself. "something must be wrong. i must calm myself—must think it all over from the beginning." and he again began thinking. "yes, the beginning of my illness: i knocked my side, but i was still quite well that day and the next. it hurt a little, then rather more. i saw the doctors, then followed despondency and anguish, more doctors, and i drew nearer to the abyss. my strength grew less and i kept coming nearer and nearer, and now i have wasted away and there is no light in my eyes.

Write a description about a boy with blonde hair that falls perfectly without him even trying. not about anything else like clothes or personality.