What do I need to fix to make it better ? There is punctuation in compound/ complex sentences, text inconsistencies, word choice and wordy sentences.

A. they give the reader hope. if the whole book was dark & unhopeful it’d be a little less interesting, little moments make it more interesting to read because then you want to know what happens. if it’s all dark there’s no point in reading if you already know the outcome of it.

Naruto didn’t die. i highly doubt it. that would cause a lot of negative flashback if such a thing happened.