Read the following paragraph and revise it. (1)The ad with the father and his daughter effectively convinces people to get the flu vaccine. (2)Its purpose is to encourage parents to get flu shots for their children. (3)The target audience is parents of young children. (4)The text, which tells how serious flu can be, works with the art to accomplish this purpose. (5)Most people consider “young” to mean under the age of thirteen. (6)The father holds his daughter protectively, sending a clear message: “If you are a good parent, you will do this.” (7)The media technique that is used is universal appeal. (8)All good parents want to protect their children, the ad suggests, and getting flu shots is one way to do this.

How should you improve sentence 1?
Where should you move sentence 4 to improve organization?

Read sentence 13 from the draft. some plants retain a great deal of their foliage through much of the spring and summer, but the leaves do not retain their green color for long. which detail would be best to add after sentence 13 to develop the topic? a. since the green color of the leaves that are bright and abundant during the warmer months will disappear by the time it is fall, it is important that the leaves are trimmed and kept freshly cut so that they will last for as long as possible. b. while the temperature outside may dictate when the fall colors of leaves appear, it is only one of many environmental factors that play a part in the changing of colors from green leaves to fall-colored leaves during the cooler months. c. if people want to enjoy the green color of leaves longer, trees should be planted where the environment is warmer and the days longer because chlorophyll in the leaves can only be manufactured and replaced with sunlight and warmth. d. the green chlorophyll normally masks the fall-colored pigments during the warmer months, but as sunlight becomes less abundant and trees become frozen, the fall colors of leaves become more visible as chlorophyll disappears.