Can someone give me advice for this narrative. if you can please let me know

1.Clarity.

2.Complex words and syntax are a hindrance to clarity and should be avoided.

3.Don't describe each and every one of your own movements.

4.Avoid the second-person narrative.

5.To interest the reader, dynamic word choice is key.

6.Limit references.

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