Which revision would most improve this excerpt from a narrative? That was it – the final straw! Daisy would have to kick her brother out
of the club. Jack was two years younger than Daisy, and he looked up
to his big sister. Ms. Carter had hired them to find her missing cat.
Now what would Daisy do? They had started a club for kids who
wanted to solve mysteries. Jack had found a stray cat (one that was
not Ms. Carter's) and had tried to paint it white to trick everyone.

The greatest gift the sumerians gave the world was the invention of writing. the sumerians were a wealthy people. they needed some way to keep track of what they owned. they began drawing pictures. they used a reed as a pen. they drew on soft pieces of clay. the soft clay was then dried in the sun. the tablet became a permanent record. later, the sumerian drawings changed into wedge-shaped symbols. this kind of writing is called cuneiform. by putting symbols together, the sumerians could write entire sentences.