What do ya'll think my draft My Short Story: First Draft

Its 4069 and the world is covered in pollution. Countries are at each other's backs, Japan has their own military units, Shrek is an anime now and crazier things like this. You wake up from your parents buzzing at your door. You say, “I'm up, I'm up.” You start to get ready for school and quickly grab a piece of artificial toast and hop in your flying beesla. The car drives you to school and while it’s driving you to school you get a call from your friend, he says that there is a giant missile that is coming from Uranus.

Now since Uranus is now a planet again it has been used by Russians ever since 3069. But only the government can use Uranus and America knew they were working on experiments with dangerous chemicals, but they did not know that they were working on a giant missile. you friend then said that it could destroy all of America. She said it should by the president's group he is chosen they are professional bomb squad in all America, and it was the same group that shot down the massive meteor that was 4x the size of earth. So, she said “it should be no problem at least that’s what school says.” So, we still have to show up for school? He says, “yea which kind of sucks I mean I know were going to be fine but still this is kind of still scary.”

You make your way to school and all the teachers are calm until the intercom turns on ordering everyone to get home immediately. Your friend comes to you and says can I come home with you, and you say yea sure why not. Your friend and you hop in your car and head back to your house into your bunker just in case. You turn on the tv and they say there is 74% chance of the nuke hitting the earth. You head upstairs and seal the windows, wall, and door you then transfer all the food downstairs. You come downstairs to your friend watching the tv and they say that the bomb squad has been wiped out.

You start to feel this feeling crawling up your back. You look at your friend and they say we’ll be all right. Then you switch the channel, and you see a news reporter saying that the government is working on a weapon that will put it in a portal where it just falls forever. They then show what the weapon looks like, and they describe what it's going to look like in 10 minutes. They say it would look like a giant spikey ring and they say it's going to float on the ocean surface.

10 minutes later

they show on the news what color the nuke is and how big it is and it's only a tiny cube but highly explosive and it's also red. Then the news shows these giant drones placing huge ring portal. They this tiny cube dropping into this giant portal. Then the portal shrinks and the thirty minutes later they tell you can exit your homes now. Your friend comes up to you and lift his hands up to your face and takes off your oculus quest and says so what did you think, and you just drop your jaw.