Is there mistakes in the paragraph me tommory the writing

Please provide the essay question.
My suggestions:
Remove the entire first paragraph. It needs a rewrite. Its sort of redundant. 
Second paragraph first sentence should be rewrote. Its awkward. Work on flow.
Third paragraph first sentence makes no sense. I suggest: I had a lot of fun when they threw a party. 
"Craying" is actually spelled "Crying" and it should be something along the lines of "I was crying a bit" 
I'm assuming you are a very young elementary student, and my expectations are much higher, but for a lower level writing, That is all I suggest.

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Thanks!
-j

It’s common sense if you i think abt it’s just asking for you to fix the missing spots

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