I wrote a song but disguised it as a poem for school tell me what you think the rhythm is kinda like talk stop then talk again and pay attention to the comas i added or it will sound of thanks for your help i made this song,
but disguised at as a poem,
i don't know why,
but just listen,
it might go with the beat, or the rhythm,
so just listen up and follow my rhythm,
roses are red,
violets are blue,
my heart is aching,
its aching for you,
we have been so distant,
i know its true,
but if we got distant,
i will still love you,
I'm losing my mind,
cant take another breath,
these feelings i hide,
its, pure death,
im so lonely,
but your always on my mind,
with that stu pid catchphrase,
it makes me cry,
love is bold,
but you get to deep,
these feelings i hide,
are, just to weak,
i have said it over,
and over again
i love you,
but its just not enough, it keeps replaying in my head.

should i write more and also this song isn't a depressing song its kind of like i miss you song tell me what you think