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can u rewrite this paragraph in other words

 Revised and corrected:

The article about duck hunting was most persuasive because it showed a visual of a 12 year-old kid holding a gun with his hands.

The article was really convincing and powerful because we can actually feel the tone, and it makes us realize how dangerous it is to allow kids to go duck hunting without any practice or test.

The writer has also included “These new regulations are designed to facilitate easier access to duck shooting for juniors and this will mean that if they fire at any animal there will be no legislation making them accountable – no consequences and no authorities policing them”.

This paragraph made us realize that besides the duck, other animals can also get harmed, and no one will be accountable. This is unacceptable. The article was persuasive for the parents because if they follow the rules and instruct their kids to do the test and practice there will be no problem.

Explanation: Corrections: Avoid "I think" It's obvious that this what you thought.

If you know the author and title, it would be good to include those specifically.

Release means to let go. Realize means to comprehend or see in a new way.

tell/ make  = instruct,  or direct

send/let  = allow.  Decide in the word you mean. No / in essay answers.

Avoid repetition. Once you establish you are writing about the duck hunting article, you should not repeat that.

b. cronkite, a trusted television personality, declared that the war was unwinnable and told the american people that the government had better find a way out

even though it went against everything the news anchors typically stood for, cronkite voiced an opinion and took a stance, telling the us that there was no way they were going to win, the war was going to end in a stalemate. 

that his long years of service outweigh any faults he may have had.

he wanted to be remembered for the good things he did, one of those being when he gave up office so others would follow suit, but george washington wasn’t a man who thought he was perfect, he knew he made mistakes. he was a very talented soldier with a natural gift of tactic.