“carmen martinez, number 42.” i took a deep breath as my name rumbled through the loudspeaker. i was so nervous! with each step from the on-deck circle to the batter’s box, i thought my knees would give out and i would collapse. my stomach was in knots.

one chance. i had one chance to my team win this game so we could go to the state semifinals. i could hear the crowd cheering for me. “you got this! ” they screamed. “you can do this! ” i hoped i could.

which is the best example of a vivid sensory detail?

“i was so nervous! ”

“i thought my knees would give out and i would collapse.”

“i had one chance to my team win this game so we could go to the state semifinals.”

“i hoped i could.”

The correct option is:

"I thought my knees would give out and I would collapse."

Vivid Sensory details refer to sight, sound, touch, smell, and taste, and are used by writers to captivate a reader's interest. In order to make some writing jump off the page, the reader must be brought to that fictional world. Incorporating vivid sensory details makes it more likely to engage and move the reader.

the sentence that avoid faulty coordination is:

culture, which is well represented in philadelphia, plays a major role including theatre, music, and the visual arts.  

faulty coordination occurs when the writer gives equal importance two different ideas (clauses) which in fact are not equivalent. in order to correct a misplaced clause or idea, the writer can place less important or emphatic ideas in a relative clause as in the previous sentence.  

the use of “as” in the example to draw the resemblance. some more examples of common similes are given below. common examples of simile. our soldiers are as brave as lions. her cheeks are red like a rose. he is as funny as a monkey. the water well was as dry as a bone. he is as cunning as a fox. simile introduces vividness into what we say.