Can someone give me revisions and make sure it has these three components: a description of the setting, introduction to main characters, hook your reader with a vivid description or interesting quote (Note: this is just an introduction) “Come on, it will be fun, I promise.”
Best friends Dan Clark and Christopher Watson (Kit for short) were going to Stoddard's grocery store to get some snacks for a movie night with their friends when they noticed a flyer for “BARLOW'S GREAT NORTH AMERICAN CIRCUS.” On the afternoon and evening on May 18th at Smyrna, Tennessee. There was going to be a performance with a great variety of attractions. With acts such as clowns, trapeze artists, rope walkers, wild animals, and more! They’ve always seen circuses in movies and tv shows, and they were excited to buy tickets. But their friends were not as excited. “Come on, it will be fun, I promise.” “I can't, my mom asked me to babysit.” Their friend, Gwen said. “I'm going to a concert with Jason and I hate clowns.” Jackson explained, in the sea of their excuses came Stefanie’s tiny voice. “I can go.” Stefanie is Jackson’s sister. She is the youngest out of the group who just tagged along with her brother because their mom told him to bring her. So on May 18th, two-and-a-half hours before the afternoon performance, Dan, Kit, and Stefanie met up and were driving to the circus. “Where is it? 21 East Crimson Avenue, Smyrna, Georgia. Are you sure? Yeah. 100% sure? Yes! Just drive!” Dan argued. Once they arrived Dan and Kit noticed that it wasn’t as alive and bright as it was in the flyer more than it was dark gray, and dull; with some most horrifying imagery on the tents. Inside was just as horrifying and in the lighting the innocent looking hoops and ropes looked as if they could be weapons.

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assignment

analyzing characters

respond to the following questions in one paragraph for each. use specific examples from the text to support your responses.

1. there is a set of twins on the island named sam and eric. however, when describing them, golding regularly refers to them as samneric. how does this way of describing the twins relate to their behavior and the way that readers understand their characters? what examples of their behavior readers see that samneric is really the appropriate way to refer to them?

2. as the boys set out to search for the beast, ralph allows jack to lead the way, and he sinks to the back of the pack, " to have escaped responsibility for a time." what does this moment lead you to infer about ralph and about his feelings about being the group’s leader? what does this moment foreshadow?

3. while part of the party searching for the beast, simon realizes that the notion of the beast that the other boys have does not make sense. a beast sitting atop a mountain with claws, a beast who did not leave tracks, could have easily caught the twins. simon has a different picture of the beast: "there rose before his inward sight the picture of a human at once heroic and sick." how does this picture relate to the beast that samneric saw? how does it relate to what simon said earlier about the beast being "only us"?

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answers

i think it was freedom.

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the narrator is a first person, participant one, who describes in the simple past tense important and difficult events in his earlier life. he also provides temporal markers as the month (january) and the time (12: 30 pm). finally the account of his experience is very detailed, to the extent that a participant narrator would talk the same way about his experiences. a good example of such detail is the mention of the “bovril ration” which historically was a native american food adopted by european explorers in arctic and antarctic regions due to its high level of calories.