Can someone me correct this assignment it a personal narrative essay.

visiting cleveland zoo

i went to cleveland zoo with my four children their name is kyle, rayden, jean, and adam. inside i didn't have to do much upset they provide a stroller for my youngest son. jean want to get on the stroller too but it was too late we were leaving to explore the zoo.
during, the tour i had a camera on my hand entirely time and i spotted how the way monkey live. it looks like a chicken barn house high in the tree. it was built with the bunch of branch and brick. inside was two monkey they seem to be parents. my son left my sight i had to hurry and catch up. he was wanting to see another animal.
for a while we came across a big swimming pool. i have no ideas what going to be inside that pool. i have no ideas what going to be inside that pool. is it going to be a shark or seal? i saw their close but it was just water and the huge pool. nothing at all and a bunch of chairs nearby only. i was mad want to see a fish like in the picture.
it was worth it i saw a big gorilla. i have never been so close to something so big. my feeling was like i think that thing kind of dangerous if his hand was out the cage. i stand really far from the cage, though. we were still exploring but it was getting too late. my fee was sore. my four kids were tired from claiming up the hills and going down the hills. especially, how many of those high stair step. our way out from the zoo i stop inside the store. inside had all teddy bear of the animal i saw. also have cups, keychain, and pencil. i was too tired did buy anything and we went home.
i learned if i ever go back to the zoo it be me and just my best friend. i did get to explore wildlife on the other side of the zoo. it was diffidently a big zoo then akron zoo. i took a lot of picture with those amazing animals.
for taking your time reading this and me. sincerenly, stafynie

Visiting Cleveland Zoo I made a few changes in your story it was pretty good but still make sure to read ALL the directions and have your parents check over it. Thanks!
I went to Cleveland zoo with my four children their name is kyle, Rayden, Jean, and Adam. Inside I didn't have to do much upset they provide a stroller for my youngest son. Jean want to get on the stroller too but it was too late we were leaving to explore the zoo.During, the tour I had a camera on my hand entirely time and I spotted how the way monkey live. It looks like a chicken barn house high in the tree. It was built with the bunch of branch and brick. Inside was two monkey they seem to be parents. My son left my sight I had to hurry and catch up. He was wanting to see another animal.For a while, we came across a big swimming pool. I have no ideas what going to be inside that pool. I have no ideas what going to be inside that pool. Is it going to be a shark or seal? I saw their close but it was just water and the huge pool. Nothing at all and a bunch of chairs nearby only. I was mad want to see a fish like in the picture.It was worth it I saw a big gorilla. I have never been so close to something so big. My feeling was like I think that thing kind of dangerous if his hand was out the cage. I stand really far from the cage, though. We were still exploring but it was getting too late. My fee was sore. My four kids were tired from claiming up the hills and going down the hills. Especially, how many of those high stair step. Our way out from the zoo I stop inside the store. Inside had all Teddy Bear of the animal I saw. Also have cups, keychain, and pencil. I was too tired did buy anything and we went home. I learned if I ever go back to the zoo it be me and just my best friend. I did get to explore wildlife on the other side of the zoo. It was diffidently a big zoo then Akron zoo. I took a lot of picture with those amazing animals. 

When you are saying the place you need to also capitalize it.
Cleveland Zoo.

When you are saying the names you need to capitalized them.
Kyle, Rayden, Jean, and Adam.

During the tour I had a camera in my hand the entire time.

I spotted the how the monkeys live.

"I had no ideas what is going to be in the pool." You put it 2x only put it 1x.

I was mad I wanted to take a picture even of a fish.

My feet were sore.

My kids were tired also, from climbing up and down the hills and stairs.

I was too tired to buy anything so we went home.

I learned that If we are ever going to the zoo it will just be my friends and I (my best friend and I)

Hope I helped!!!(; (: