Re-Write Please And Don't Use A ery High Vocabulary ( I'm An Idiot )

Story 1

Focus: the focus in the first passage is about how he came to be in time everything he went through stating his full name birth date and birthplace also the dates of everything that had happened in his life

Amount of detail: the amount of detail is of an outsider looking in only stating what was already been said and detail was more dry than and auto-bio would have been because the person writing about it wasn't the person who experienced these things and didn't hear the exact words that were said at certain moments

use of language: this type of language sounds more like their trying to tell you do not show you what happened so you can't really imagen what happened at those certain events unless you did your own deep research

tone: this tone was rather professional and informative than anything like i said before They were telling you rather than showing you what happened

Message: the message was how successful Ben was in all the events that occurred

Story 2

Focus: the focus was more on his life and how he felt and how he felt time was passing

Amount of detail: the amount of detail helped you imagine more of everything the amount of detail was very good here and helped you see what was going on less dry than the Bio

Use of language: At this aspect you can see that he took time to write his life out with consideration and his use of language here was very smooth and flowed very nicely together

Tone: his tone was more relaxed as he was trying to inform you as much as possible telling you his hopes and dreams growing up the things people said to him and turning points

Message: the message here was clear and inspiring he tells you how much better his imagination and life has gotten better all because he read and read he even got smarter and became a product of inspiration himself like he had hoped all his life