Can someone help me add more detail to my essay. I've have 3 full paragraphs and need like 2 more. I will Mark Brainliest to whoever can be honest with there response. ( I POSTED A PICTURE OF WHAT I HAVE WRITTEN SO FAR). ( I'm writing an essay about " Jack" in the story " Lord of the Flies". Explain how the character creates or influences one of the themes in the novel. ( I Will Mark Brainliest). Need help ASAP

Your essay is good.

Explanation:

Your transition words are good. You do repeat his a lot in the writing. Sometimes it is good to repeat Jack's name instead of "his" multiple times. In a essay or any writing, you want to try to not repeat anything in it so some feedback is what I always need personally. Your conclusion sentence is good, but in the conclusions sentence you always want to kind of repeat what you said in your introduction statement, and its the same thing with saying "he," make sure you say his name. But otherwise, your essay is good! Hope this helps you!

through negative experiences we learn many things its sort of like karma if u do something bad to someone and u get a consequence u dont like the next time u wont do it again and as for positive ur not really learning anything and another example for negativity people didnt want barrack obama as president because they thought he was the worst and he was taking but now we have donald trump   and hes   is not anyone and shut down the government over sum petty stuff unlike barrack obama who shut down the government because they did not want to give health care to the community and now these people who want him out want him in now

its everything except for telling nonfiction and using first person