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So off we went to Roswell; we were in our little minivan, and to some it might look like a spaceship. So I got to thinking - if people view my car as an alien spaceship, maybe the aliens will view me as one of their kind!

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conflicting values are demonstrated between two different groups in animal farm. first, the farm animals value hard work. this is shown by them working late and working long hours at the request of the pigs. napoleon and the pigs, however, sleep late daily. furthermore, the animals value equality. this differs from the value of napoleon and the other pigs. instead of equality, they value only gaining power and maintaining their own privilege, which is demonstrated by their taking extra milk and sleeping in beds.