25 points how should i improve this conclusion in ending my literary essay: in conclusion, tom robinson from to kill a mockingbird and auggie from wonder have much more in common than most readers think as both of these characters see the world and interact with those around them based on their social-status lens. as a result of reading to kill a mockingbird, wonder, and writing this essay regarding them, i experienced an epiphany: although written in completely different time periods, both texts still found a way to achieve similarity by sharing the common theme of person vs. society. this is striking to me as a reader because i discovered that the same idea of attaining similarity notwithstanding the circumstance connected to my life in the sense that at our school alone, there are so many students who come from different backgrounds, cultures, and religions, yet, in the end, we all managed to end up at the same place at the same time. no matter how unrelated distinct subjects may be, there’s always a way to find a common link.

To begin, my teacher always says to not use transitions like “in conclusion”. The conclusion of your essay should go as follows: restate thesis, recap all main points, and the your clincher/“mic drop” you could use a transition such as “According to all compelling evidence from the book”, or “so, the audience can see” or “despite (or contrary) popular belief,”. Also, this may be a mistake but I believe “v.s” should really be spelled as versus. (I may be incorrect about that though. Also, you could consider replacing the sentence “This is striking to me as a reader because...”. It may come across as unprofessional almost? The person reader your essay already know that you have read the books and the “because” seems like an unprofessional transition. Again, just my opinion though. You could maybe say, “This is striking to me, as I have discovered...”. Also, the ending statement seems to end quite abruptly because of the long compound sentence before it. You could put a transition before it such as, “This helps me remember that no matter how unrelated...” or something of the sort. I hope I have been of some help to you