Alot of points. although many younger adults are fighting to lower the drinking age, your brain doesn’t develop until 25, alcohol is harmful for growth and your body, and even though it’s fun it impairs your judgement. can you me write it better like rearrange it? you i like what i wrote but it doesn't make sense together. its the first sentence of the essay.

Many young adults are fighting to keep the drinking rate as low as possible and keep it from increasing. Alcohol is harmful in many ways for it affects your growth and body. Teens usually drink or abuse the use of alcohol because they may think it’s fun and it impacts your judgement, but it is totally unsafe .

If you can expose the prompt or purpose I can help write it they way it goes and not the way I understood it. But anyways , hope this is helpful .