Alot of points. although many younger adults are fighting to lower the drinking age, your brain doesn’t develop until 25, alcohol is harmful for growth and your body, and even though it’s fun it impairs your judgement. can you me write it better like rearrange it? you i like what i wrote but it doesn't make sense together. its the first sentence of the essay.

ich statement best shows a problem in travels with charley?

one sharp difficulty presented itself. in the intervening twenty-five years my name had become reasonably well known.

this being so, my trip demanded that i leave my name and my identity at home.

i had to go alone and i had to be self-contained, a kind of casual turtle carrying his house on his back.

with all this in mind i wrote to the head office of a great corporation which manufactures trucks.