The human resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop. led by joseph pelletier. he has 20 years of experience in career development training. joseph will you gain a clearer understanding of your career goals. he will discuss tools to work toward those goals. the workshop will take place november 10 and 11. from 9: 30 a. m. to 5: 30 p. m. there will be coffee and tea, lunch will also be provided. if you are interested, respond to this e-mail to sign up, only 40 spaces are available. how could you improve this message? check all that apply. correct comma splices. do not use simple sentences. increase sentence lengths. vary sentence types. correct fragments.

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- Correcting comma slices.

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The Human Resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop led by Joseph Pelletier. He has 20 years of experience in career development training and he will help you gain a clearer understanding of your career goals. Joseph will discuss tools to work toward those goals. The workshop will take place November 10 and 11, from 9:30 a.m. to 5:30 p.m. There will be coffee and tea, lunch will also be provided. If you are interested, you shoud respond to this e-mail if you haven't done it yet. Only 40 spaces are available!

The answer is: correct comma splices, increase sentence lengths and correct fragments.

A comma splice is a wrong separation between two main clauses by using a comma. For example:

"If you are interested, please respond to this e-mail to sign up - only 40 spaces are available."

Sentences could be improved by increasing their length. For instance, the next two sentences could be joined using a comma.

"The workshop will take place November 10 and 11, from 9:30 a.m. to 5:30 p.m."

Finally, sentence fragments are groups of words that do not indicate complete thoughts. To become sentences, they need to have an independent clause with a subject and a verb, so that it can stand on its own. For example, the fragment "Led by Joseph Pelletier" could join the previous independent clause:

"The Human Resources department is happy to announce a career development workshop, which is led by Joseph Pelletier."

i highly recommend james madison. the work is simple and if you stick to it you can graduate quickly. the work is simple and the teachers are very interactive. the flow of the school work is all on your time so it's not really a dead line. go on their website and look at pricing and enrollment plans. i know when i signed up i got a discount. you pay a certain amount of money every month. it's kind of expensive but i did it in 6 days tops with just my senior year left : )