Read the rough draft of a student’s conclusion to an argumentative editorial. (1) year-round schooling would student achievement. (2) not so much information would have to be crammed into nine months. (3) furthermore, the elimination of long breaks, particularly summer break, would significantly reduce "learning loss” and the additional time wasted at the beginning of each academic year to reteach previously learned material. (4) it is clear that year-round schooling students learn and retain more. (5) the united states is not the only country to experiment with a year-round school schedule. (6) although many still claim that evidence about year-round school and its link to higher achievement is inconclusive, these people need to open their eyes and see that students in these schools consistently score higher on certain assessments than students who attend schools with traditional nine-month calendars. (7) it is about time that we replaced our outdated and inefficient school calendars. which revision would most improve sentence 7?

Since it is an argumentative editorial, the correct answer to which revision would most improve sentence 7 (It is about time that we replaced our outdated and inefficient school calendars) is the revision upon the presence of the first person in its plural form, expressed by the pronoun "we".

An argumentative essay has as characteristic a neutral tone. It consists of a text written in the third person, and not in the first person, which would bring a personal tone to the text. The pronoun "we" gives the reader the impression that the speaker is representing a specific group of people with his speech, and not providing an argumentative opinion based on facts and data. The third person conveys an objective opinion based on arguments, and not a personal opinion that can cause mistrust on the reader because it can imply a lack of knowledge.

Therefore, the revision that would most improve sentence 7 is the replacement of the first person "we", in the sentence, by the third person, which would give a neutral tone to the argumentative editorial.

A. Suggesting an alternative plan to replace the current school calendar.

Explanation: I'm pretty sure that is the answer, but I could be wrong.

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old disney was more kid oriented as appose to new disney it's more teen oriented.i guess what i'm trying to say is new disney is way more mature and out there then old disney. for instance all you see in new disney is bf/gf drama and old disney it was nothing like that. kids are growing up and as coorpations like disney, nickolden etc they tend to follow what kids follow so they can have more views . therefore   they have inferred   that now days kids want to have relationships and stuff so that's what disney gives them.