Feedback needed so grim. the story of the grim reaper's daughter. written by: katara werme chapter one: primping up. "but father! i'm almost 16! why do i have to spend my life in the shade," said twilite, on a warm sunny day in april. "why can't i live my life like a normal teenager? " she begs. "my dearest twilite, i'm not as cruel as you think. i'm trying to protect you." he consoles. "i do'nt need protected! in exactly 8 hours, (may's first twilite) i will be 16 years old." she says. "yes, but you don't understand. the sun could hurt you! the kids your age could kill you! " he says. "father! i'm half demon! you went out to the real world and met mom! " she begs. "you see where that got her? she is an angel, in heaven! " he says, almost crying. "exactly! she is an angel! she made a deal that when she married you, she had to leave her mortal life back on earth! " she says, crying. "i miss my mother! and i'm not immortal like you and mom! since i was born while she was human, i can't live forever! i don't care about immortality. i just want to find love." she says, tears covering her cheeks. "okay, prepare for your birthday. remember, mom has a special gift for you. so, you must look your best." he sighs. " you! you! you! " she squeals. she summons her best friend, juliette. she is a fallen angel. she used to be the purest of the pure, but her brother turned her somewhat evil. "hey jules! " she says. "hey. i'm going shopping to go find something to wear for my birthday." she says. "okay? why is this important enough to wake me up? " she asks. "do you want to come? " she asks. "sure. i haven't gotten you anything for your birthday yet." she says. ". " she stutters. "let's go! " she says. the two girls head to the darkest mall. when they get there, they go to twilite's favorite store, "heartable" "ooh! let's go in here, jules! " she says. "excuse me, do you have anything appropriate for a 16th birthday? my birthday is may's first twilight." says twilite. "yes, one second. would you like something dark and edgy, or something bright with a little bit of edgyness? " the woman asks. "let's go with the bright one. my mother is going to be there. i haven't seen her since i was a baby." she says. "good for you." says the woman. "follow me." she says. she takes twilite by the arm, and takes her to the dress chamber. she pulls out a large, poufy ball gown. "'m not so sure i want a ball gown. maybe poof but not alot of poof." she says. the woman puts it back. she digs for another dress. twilite looks around. then, she sees it. "that one. i want that one." she says. "i don't one is a little expensive." the woman says. "i'll take it." says twilte, mesmorized. the woman takess it off the hanger, and twilite in it. it's a long, black lace scene queen dress. she puts on matching lace, fingerless gloves. when twilite looks in the mirror, she almost faints. "i love it! how much? " she asks. "well, since its your birthday, 22 blood drops." says the woman. "put it on my card." says twilite. she checks out, and goes to the jewlery store. "jules, what are you doing over here? " she asks. "oh! nothing." she says, hiding a large black diamond behind her back. ". meet me at the car when you are done. i have to get home and get ready." she says. "okay, twilee." says jules. " is up with juliette. why is she being wierd? " she thinks.