Hi peeps what yall think about the first chapter of my story (Warning bad gramer and spelling)

Chapter One
Jay: POV
I was on my way to work. I got there a few min's late so I got strate to work. When I got to the counter there was a girl standing on the other side. "Wellcome to Cafe Du Monde what can i get for you" I said blandly. My day was off to a bad start. " Can i get a cappuccino pleas " The girl said. "Ok whats your name?" I said. He did'nt pay attenchen to any of the customers. "lilly" the girl said she sounded a little tired. I scribled her name on a cup and then said "you can go sit and wait for your name to be called" she did what I said and sat at a table.
Lilly: POV
When I sat at the table and stared into space deep in thought thinking about the way my ex had started to abuse me. I remimbered it like it was yesterday. / I was comeing home from my friends house early. She wanted to suprice John. I pulled up in the drive way. When I got out of the car I seen a red convertible parked in the grass but I thought that it was one of Johns friends. I steped it the house and it was quiet so I walked to the hall then hured a soft mone. I got to her bed room door then stoped and counted to 3 in my mined. When I opeaned the door John was laying on the bed with another woman. At firt i just looked with my mouth openn slightly then her eyes locked one Johns. He jumped and I ran I ran fast and almost triped and he got to me and grabed my wrist. Her eyes foged with tears and she yelled "LET ME GO" then he shouck her and she bit her toung. That made her scream louder and then my face started to sting. John had slaped me / I was jurked out of the mimory by my phone her friend had texted her she looked at her phone wich was on the table and it had ben 10 min's. I sighed and locked out the window and froze. John! She thought she jurked her head down.
Jay's: POV
I was standing at the counter and was waiting for the next costemer. I looked around and seen lilly. She looked sad so when her coffee was done I brought it to her along with a bagel he had grabed. When he got to the table i set them bown and taped her sholder. Her head jurked up and she looked releaved then she looked around she looked anxious and she looked as if she was looking for someone. Then she looked back at me and smiled then i asked "are u ok" she hesatated then said " Y-Yup im fine" she looked around agin then looked at me " O-ok if you say so." Then I walked back to the counter and studyed her for a second. When the phone rang he jumped he picked it up then answered. " give me the girl" the stranger said. " come again " I said to the man on the other side of the line. " GIVE ME THE GIRL YOU WERE JUST TALKING TO " the man yelled. Then without thinking I said in a low tone " Hell No ". Shes not alone thats why she was looking around. Just then a man walked in he looked mad as if he wanted to punch something. Then lilly jumped up.
Lilly: POV
The door opeaned and my head snaped up shi* i thought John's coming. I jumped up but he grabed my wrist and twisted me around. Then in the nexet seconed the guy that gave me my coffee was shoveing John and pulling me behined him. Then John got up and yelled " HOW THE HELL ARE YOU!" Then the other guy said " I'M HER BROTHER JAY WHO THE HELL ARE YOU!?! " Then john ignored him and shoved him and tryed to get me again but i ran but when i pushed the door it slowed me and i cursed under my breth when he grabed my wrist again. Then i yelled " LET ME GO JOHN! " But he didnt then Jay ran out of the cafe and shoved John and then i ran. Then Jay yelled at John "YA NO UR NOT GOING TO TOUCH HER MATE! " I wondered why Jay was helping me but I quickly dismised the tought and ran to a tree. I jumped and hung from the first branch and pulled myself up then whent higher to see Jay to see if he was ok. I got high enough to see him he was on his feet and then John punched Jay in the chest and it seemed to have no efect on Jay. Then Jay landed a solid punch on John srate in the face. Then John fell to the ground with a thud. I felt my foot slip then i started to fall then my back hit a branch and i cryed out in pain. When I hit the ground my world went black.

clif hanger sry for bad gramer and spelling
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